i, the wordsmith (second draft)
by Jason Alan
While I have taken a break from writing lately (and reading. Sorry, Rami), I have been doing quite a bit of editing. Some time in the next few months, I will be using createspace.com to offer my first paperback. The first digital book I released is poetry so I’m just going in order, but it won’t be just a port of Poetry of a Madman. It will include most of the poems in it, but I didn’t think it had enough pages to warrant a paper book so I have added and will continue to add material (including some art, hopefully) until I am satisfied with the product.
The poem in this post will be the title, and while I do like (mostly) what I have written so far, I will be adding to it and shuffling some words around quite a bit before it’s ready to be in the book, let alone have the book named after it. While I am always open for discussion on all my pieces, this one in particular needs input from you. Let me know if some parts don’t flow well, or if a certain word would work better. I’m creating a product and your help only makes what I create even better for readers.
i, the wordsmith,
forge felonious phrases
in dank diction dungeons;
a half-full kerfuffle
of crestfallen curmudgeons.
i, the wordsmith,
construct metaphors,
maxims and mottos in
valleys of vivacious verbiage.
drinking inspiration
blowing words in the smoke-
the greenest of the foliage.
i, the wordsmith,
scald vernacular to nigh combustion;
to scorch, a robust fever
searing in poetic grandeur.
waxing obscure
in a swaying sea of azure.
i, the wordsmith,
deliver the hammer;
with an arch boldly true,
vainly accurate.
striking song, pounding prose.
bringing them to a close
along with this, that, these and those.
i, the wordsmith,
punctuate sentences with conflict
an emoticonvict
with wet eyes and dry wit.
my mind the drill, the rhyme the bit.
i, the wordsmith,
post paragraphs aplenty
pouring out pages
profusely pushing to apprehend a penny.
i, the wordsmith,
put tongues in cheeks
accents on letters like days on weeks.
thoughts on black and white
alphabetical peeks.
i, the wordsmith,
sculpt blistering expression;
shaped with formidable fury
sparks fly, composing
incandescent symphonies of worry-
pulsating, reverberating
among the corridors of thought:
the imagination of the reader.
As always, thanks for stopping by and thanks in advance for the comments, even if you just roll by to flip me off.
I like the humour of this. I particularly like the stanza about ‘putting tongues in cheeks’.
The line ‘in a swaying sea of azure’ made no sense to me where it is; it doesn’t fit with the fire images before it. But this is just my opinion.
I agree. It’s one of the parts I’m not too jazzed about. Your opinion is always welcome.
Well, the poet is like a wordsmith who forges the elements of the word. Amazing piece of poetry. I love it
Thanks!
You are welcome
I really love this, Jason. What a great way to introduce your book. But, you want us to be pick it apart…I just stumbled on this part, “blowing words in the smoke- the greenest of the foliage.” I’m not sure why…is the green referring to the valley of the verbiage..maybe another dash up there. Or, maybe I’m misunderstanding it. That’s all I got. Great work.
It needs to be changed around a bit on that, but it’s a pot reference.
Ha ha ha…duh. Of course it is!
I meant oregano. Strike that from the record.
You’re forgiven. I only ask that I hear from you soon again.
I think it’s well-assembled. “(Vainly) accurate” catches at my mind, but I have no other adverb to suggest.
Thanks. I struggled with that line for a while before I gave up and used what I had. Still strikes me a bit off.
I like the energetic and active words. ‘with wet eyes and dry wit’ – love this line!
Thanks!
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Cool, thank you.