it goes unchanged.
a heart not beating.
I give to you.
That’s sad; it makes me think of a doctor showing a woman her still-born child.
Boy, did I just make that disturbing.
Yeah, you did. Good job.
This is wonderful, it’s got an excellent usage of minimalism and, in my opinion, is even better than the last of your micropoetry posts; great work! I really like poetry like this where there’s an air of ambiguity about it, really allowing the reader to complete the emotional impact of the poem themselves rather than have it spoon-fed to them.
I actually didn’t like it so much, and thought about scrapping it.
Glad you didn’t, it’s good.
Nice write, I think about scrapping lots of my work but we are our own worse critics
Yeah, I suppose we are.
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